Tuesday, October 14, 2008

Excellent model essays

There are many excellent essays written by my students which might be helpful to you as you prepare for your exam.

Friends by Manu Menon

Friends are people whom we turn to when our spirits need a lift. They are always by our side through thick and thin. They stand beside us even when our disposition is not perfectly right and will fight for us if we are oppressed. Therefore, it is clear that friends play a vital role in shaping who we are today. But what qualities exactly do we need to look for in a friend?
A friend should always be caring towards you. He or she should take interest in your problems no matter how big or petty your problem may be. A friend should be able to sit beside you and encourage you to keep your chin up even when everyone else is against you. A friend’s empathy and lovingness will also replenish your worn-out soul and will make you realize how important a friend really is.
Apart from that, a friend should be an honest person. An honest friend will dissipate any worries that he or she is lying towards you. A friend’s honesty will enable you to trust his or she’s opinion when it comes to telling you the truth about yourself. For example, an honest friend will remand you on your declining grades and will ask you to work harder while a dishonest friend will see it with a blind eye. Therefore, an overall improvement in yourself will be noticeable if you have an honest friend.
Moreover, a friend should be generous both emotionally and knowledge wise. A friend who is generous ought to be able to connect with you and provide emotional support. He or she should also be generous when it comes to sharing knowledge. A true friend must be ever-ready to help you when you are inept in certain subjects. A friend can easily guide you towards understanding the subject matter better as he or she is often on the same page as you. The only difference is that you can’t quite grasp the content of the page per se.
Besides that, a friend must also be able to humour you. Humour plays a quintessential role in making your day more lively and enjoyable. Friends who pull your leg and mess about will indefinitely make life seem so much better. As they say, laughter is the best medicine and a little levity on rainy days is always welcomed.
In conclusion, friends are people we spend most of our time with. Thus, we have to be selective when it comes to choosing our friends.

24 comments:

mohd azizi husaini said...

thanks ihope this model essay can push up my grammar skill

girlpink52 said...

i hope i will i get more than A or more than excellent in english essay writting ang speech ... i hope so ... wish me luck dude .. wish u all lucky !!!

TiNesH9402 said...

this essay's good!
It made me realise how much more improvements i should make in my own writing.

genius94 said...

this essay is very good.it uses a lot of gerunds and an extensive vocabulary..thanks^^

genius94 said...

this sample essay is really good and impressed me. it uses a lot of gerunds and an extensive vocabulary...thanks for the posting^^

Yaya said...

The only difference is that you can’t quite grasp the content of the page per se.

what does that mean actually?

jennyho said...

you cannot understand what is being said on the page...

Raja Fatin Athirah said...

Fea and I had been friends since primary school. We were so close as we did almost everything together. We were also well known as one of the top students in our school. Eventhough we were in different classes, but we still dear to each other. Fea was also my neighbour. Which made us become even closer.

It was the second day of school since it was started on 3rd January 2011. A new girl named Nazirah registered at our school. She became popular drastically as she was beautiful and rich. Most of the boys were attracted to her. Everyone wanted to be her friends including me. That was the moment I started neglecting Fea. She noticed that I wanted to make Nazirah pay attention to me.

"What are you doing now? You have left me for that new girl." Fea asked me. I did not give any response to her. I just walked away without even looking at her. After a few steps, I turned and I noticed there were tears falling from her eyes. Maybe she was hurt by the way I treated her. I did not care about other matters. All I knew was, I needed to befriend with Nazirah. I did not want Fea to be an interrupter in my life.

A few days later, Nazirah and I had been friends. We were together no matter where we went. Rumors about Nazirah and I were spreading all over the school. They said I had been Nazirah's follower as I was there where ever she was. I started to abandon my studies and my results dropped terribly. I was afraid to to show my result to my parents as I was one of the top students before. Finally, no matter how hard I hide it, they knew about y result. They were really angry with my behavior when I tried to lie to them. I was grounded and my pocket money was cut. I was sad and stressed up.

I tried to ask for Fea's help but no avail. She did not wanted to help me. She said that was my problem not hers. So she asked me to stay away from her. I was shocked. I never thought she would ever did that. Out of sudden, I realised I was nobody to her. While I was having a major problem in my studies, to pick up every lessons that I learnt back, Fea came.

"I am always here for you." Fea put her hand on my shoulder. I was shocked with Fea appearance at my house. I never thought that she still wanted to be my friend. I realised that Fea never left me. She kept her eyes on me from far away. I bursted into tears. I asked for forgiveness and she just smiled and nodded her head. I was really thankful that Fea still wanted to befriends with me again and that was the happiest moment in my life.


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Sathiyan<>Mon said...

Urs awesome...
good description about friend in the material n cyber world where we are in....
superficial grammar mistakes...
truly merely deeply make a sense

blooregard q kazoo said...

what does "se" mean at the last three paragraph at the very last sentence?

jennyho said...

'per se' is a latin phrase which means 'in itself'...meaning that you cannot understand the content itself without the help of your friend..

qyla aqillah said...

ITS GOOD . WHERE I'M SUPOSSED TO GET YOUR BOOK ?

jennyho said...

aQILLAH, you can get a copy of my book from Popular book store.
Essential English for SPM BY
JENNY TAN AND AINON ZUBIAR, PEARSON LONGMAN

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Joanne :) said...

the last paragraph one is we have to be selective when it comes to choose a friend. Is CHOOSE not CHOOSING :)

Joanne :) said...

the last paragraph, we have t be selective when it comes to choose our friends. Is CHOOSE not CHOOSING. :)

jennyho said...

Joanne, it is choosing..when it comes to choosing our friends..it is used here as a gerund..

Amerawrrr said...

Hello teacher jenny ho. I'm having my spm english exam next week. so could you post some grammar skills ? for example, the tenses. you see, im not good with my grammar :(

saiful zainol said...

you are very good

shahir asmuie said...

On the third paragraph:
"A friend’s honesty will enable you to trust his or she’s opinion when it comes to telling you the truth about yourself."
Is it "when it comes to telling you..." or "when it comes to tell you..."? Check this one pls

shahir asmuie said...

On the third paragraph:
"A friend’s honesty will enable you to trust his or she’s opinion when it comes to telling you the truth about yourself."
Is it "...to telling you..." or "...to tell you..." ? Check this one pls

HL ♥ said...

Can this essay be argumentative speech?

Joy Lim said...

just a tip, A friend’s...his or she’s opinion when it.... should be his or hers

ŠíŽŠíŽ said...

It's helpful, thanks for sharing. But why "his or she’s opinion" is using she's but not her?

Sorry my English is bad...

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